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@@ -45,8 +45,8 @@ <h1>About Me</h1>
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-                            <p>I'm Tom, a software developer with a strong foundation in computer science and data science. I thrive on problem-solving challenges and constantly seek out new opportunities for growth.</p>
-                            <p>In my career so far, I've had the pleasure of collaborating with a diverse range of clients and teams, bringing my technical expertise and enthusiasm to every project.</p>
+                            <p>I'm Tom, a software developer with foundations in computer science and data science. I thrive on problem-solving challenges and constantly seek out new opportunities for growth.</p>
+                            <p>In my career so far, I've had the privilege of collaborating with a range of clients and teams, bringing my technical expertise and enthusiasm to every project.</p>
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@@ -70,7 +70,7 @@ <h2>Deloitte</h2>
                             <h2>Startmate</h2>
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                         <p>Student Fellow <i>(Nov 2023 - Dec 2023)</i></p>
-                        <p>Built fundamental understandings of the startup ecosystem through hands on workshops and activities.</p>
+                        <p>Gained hands-on experience in startup environments through intensive workshops, projects, and collaboration with founders.</p>
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